Prompt:    One day you are reading a book. One of the characters jumps out of the book. Write a story about what happens next.
 

One day I sat down on a couch to read the book Treasure Island.  I carefully turned a page and out jumped a pirate!  "Ahh!" I screamed in fear.  "He's alive!"  "Follow me!" he exclaimed with a smirking grin.  I watched nervously as he marched out the front door.

    I ran after him, not sure where he was taking me.  He led me to our grage.  My eyes were glued to him as he slung a large, black shovel over his back and strolled into our backyard.  "Dig here!" he declared.  I was very confused.  Why would he want me to dig there?  I reluctantly hammered my shovel into the hard dirt and slung it away.  I tried to pound the shovel into the dirt again, but it hit a hard object   After dropping my shovel with a large thud, I carefully dug around it.  I was finally able to pull it out.  It was full of shiny dimonds, rubys, and gold!  I was so suprised!  "I'm rich!" I shrieked with tears of gladness streaming from my eyes.  I was tickled pink.  "I told you so," he declared with a smile. 

    I suddenly realized that he knew that the treasure was there all along.  I was very lucky that I read Treasure Island and was very happy that I did.

Score Point 3
The response is focused on digging for treasure and contains elaboration and support in the form of specific details ("…he exclaimed with a smirking grin… I relunctantly hammered my shovel into the hard dirt… After dropping my shovel with a large thud,… I shrieked with tears of gladness…").  The writer's organization provides a reasonable sense of logical progression and overall completeness.