Prompt:    One day you are reading a book. One of the characters jumps out of the book. Write a story about what happens next.
 

One day I was readind a book about Mickal Jordan  It was very interesting.  He was doing slam dunks and 3 point shots it was amazing two men were garding him he faked them out.  The he went for the shot in said to myself "how does he do it" and then to my surprise he jumped out the picture and said "hi wat's you name"  m,m,m, my names Jason.  Wona go shoot some hoops shure then I asked him would he sign my basketball after he signed my ball we shot 3 pointers and evan slamed it but not that hard.  Then he had to go he said he'd visit again and he asked were's the food in the house on the shelf "thanks and good by" he said to me.

 The next month he came back to see me I was realy glad so was he he was sort of like my brother but evan nicer than him.  And every month or week Mickal would come back to see me and sometimes my family and they liked him evan better than I did.  Sometimes my dad would play basketball and at my house he gave his poster and autograph.

Score Point 2
The response exhibits some progression of ideas and events and provides some supporting details.  However, the supporting details do not always contribute to the narrative ("he said he'd visit again and he asked were's the food…").